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Ankle Lockby ~JonKin

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Within a jungle clearing in the Congo,two female combatants were locked in a fierce battle. The larger of the two was a leader of a band of cutthroat thieves calling themselves the Crimson Fangs that steal and kill any victim unfortunate enough to cross their path. The dark-skinned woman was a warrior that dedicated her life to fighting evil where ever it festers. The woman, known as Jhazira, tracked down the nomadic band of thieves to a spot that the group uses for a camp. Using her skills in stealth, Jhazira managed to take out the other members before confronting the leader alone. Angry at the gall that someone would challenge her, she rushed toward Jhazira with her hands out. Seeing the attempt at a running grab, Jhazira sidestepped the attack with a crouching spin. With percise timing, Jhazira grabbed the leg of the charging leader with her on leg and brought her larger opponent crashing to the ground face first. While the leader struggled to get on her back, Jhazira was already on her feet and had the left foot of her opponnent in her grasp. Now with the tactical advantage, Jhazira can get the answers she wants.

"Where is my stuff?" Jhazira demanded.

"Lick a hippo's anus!" the leader answered.

Jhazira's facial expression was one of momentary shock, then fury as she applied pressure to the large woman's ankle.

"WHERE IS MY STUFF!" Jhazira yelled loudly.

The woman didn't answer her attacker this time, but was struggling desperately to free her ankle.

Jhazira's patience had ran out. She took the ankle from under her armpit and grasped it with both of her hands. With all the power she could muster, Jhazira twisted the ankle until it was bended in a way that a human foot was not meant to bend.

"AGGGGUUUUHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!" Screamed the leader now in crucial pain. Jhazira however still had not released to now-broken ankle.

"Fail to answer me again, and it's your leg next." , Jhazira said as she lifted her foot up. "Now, where. Is. My. STUFF?

"In the large tent, there is a bag next to a saddle. The items you seek are in there. Your spear is next to it."

"Alright. Go fetch them."

"What? I cannot walk!"

"Then crawl!! You don't need ankles to do that!"

As the large leader got on her knees to crawl the long distance to her tent, she thought to herself, " I WILL get my revenge one day!"

Critique by =Dualmask Oct 19, 2012, 10:57:31 PM

This is the kind of stuff I need to do more often. Characters interacting, events telling a story, not just presenting a character and saying "look how pretty/strong I am". The poses are great and the write up is well done too.

Proportions are all over the place though. The prone woman looks significantly larger and taller than Jhazira; not sure if that's what you were going for but it caught my attention, as did the hands. I don't know if you do this or not, but I get the impression that you drew the hands (particularly the leader's hands) out of your head with no reference. A little practice can go a long way, and you have the perfect reference material available whenever you want right at the end of your own wrists.

I'm glad to see you're putting a some shadows in your work, but just remember that the size and depth of shadows depends on the light source in the scene. Just off the top of my head, the shadows on the defeated leader should be denser than those on Jhazira because she'd be more distant from the light source. Not only that, but Jhazira herself should be casting some shadows on the leader, and shadows are never truly black. Use a dark blue blended into the colors; if your software doesn't have blending modes, try using lower opacity.

I think you could have put more effort into the background details. I find that things like foliage and other natural terrain elements are pretty hard to get wrong; you don't have to rely on perspective or measurements, but you could have done a lot more than what you did. Take a look at some real life or photos of trees and bushes and simplify what you see, but add some detail to them. Some lines for the dents and breaches in tree bark, some more defined shapes for the leaves that make up bushes, some rocks and gravel drawn by hand instead of a simple texture on the ground; these things can go a long way toward improving the visual quality of your work and all it takes is a bit more effort.

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~dangerfan Oct 22, 2012

For the invader from the Mbeke plains, her kinswomen's height was a decided advantage which made their army the most feared in the land. But she now was finding out at the hands of Jhazira that, in the jungle, what was needed was speed and agility. Jhazira turned her arogant opponent into a pretzel and thus turned away the spearhead of this invasion into the jungle. Jhazira won this battle, but she knew more of the tall warriors would come!

~JonKin Oct 22, 2012 Hobbyist Digital Artist

Awesome write-up! Shame the option to fave comments isn't available.

~dangerfan Oct 22, 2012

I'll take your comment as a fave!

~ShadowLeviathanZero Oct 20, 2012

All I can say is nice and awesome.

~JonKin Oct 20, 2012 Hobbyist Digital Artist

Thanks man.

*Toni123456 Oct 20, 2012

She should break her toes!!

*LavenderBlade Oct 19, 2012

Very nice work! I like the hold Jhazira has her in. Your backgrounds add such depth to your pieces.

~JonKin Oct 19, 2012 Hobbyist Digital Artist

Thanks a lot, LB! Iput a lot of work into this background to really make the scene tell a story. Earlier this eek, I as was going to scrap the image and put it in my personal scrap pile. I was inspired by a couple of pic here on this site to not quit, and here it is.

~xitres Oct 19, 2012

Nice!

~JonKin Oct 19, 2012 Hobbyist Digital Artist

Thank you! Appreciate the fave, too!

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